Tbh I don't really like poems. I feel like my brain doesn't work that way. Yours seem to be more palatable. I feel like I would like to like them. I'll keep reading yours and maybe I will like them.
the image really helped pre-visualise the scene that the dialogue comes from. did the writing come from the image... i feel it must have been inspired by the laconic familiar beauty of the two tangled women
wrestling, the eroticism brushed away by the knowledge they are sisters leaves a deeper understanding between the two of them born of sisterhood.
A prose poem. Reminds me of the pieces in Baudelaire’s Paris Spleen. Very good.
Chris, thanks so much. I’m not familiar with that work but I’ll check it out!
LOVED this. Thanks Annie!
I just made art for my lunchbox.
Your writing is very poetic and works out weird parts of my brain
Thanks Mike! Mission accomplished I suppose :)
Tbh I don't really like poems. I feel like my brain doesn't work that way. Yours seem to be more palatable. I feel like I would like to like them. I'll keep reading yours and maybe I will like them.
cat fight?
Hey Annie,
This whole dialogue reminded me of LDR’s The Screaming of the Tyrannosaur. If you haven’t watched it, I recommend you do.
Best,
Mahdi
Wow! Mahdi thank you for that recommendation, looks amazing. And that you so much for reading and sharing :)
Something in the dialogue reminds me of Ishmael, Daniel Quinn. I love this.
this is so damn effective. I know nothing about what these two look like but I see and hear them so clearly
This is the first thing I've read from your fingertips and I'm rushing for more
Hemingway does similar things in his short stories, but with “George said” interspersed
So much character and voice in these disembodied dialogues. A fantastic, clever, and pacy read. Thank you for sharing!
the image really helped pre-visualise the scene that the dialogue comes from. did the writing come from the image... i feel it must have been inspired by the laconic familiar beauty of the two tangled women
wrestling, the eroticism brushed away by the knowledge they are sisters leaves a deeper understanding between the two of them born of sisterhood.